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双语续写技能点拨—心理描写

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双语续写技能点拨—心理描写

一、心理描写的原则

1.落实“细微处”描写

在描写人物心理活动时,一定要突出细节,所有的感情都体现在“细微处”,所以尽量不用笼统的词,如smile,cry等,而用相关的细节性词汇或词组,例如:

①Lily smiled happily.

②Lily wore a shining smile on her face.

分析: ①句中“smile”是一个笼统的描述微笑的词汇,而②句中使用了wore a shining smile,用词组的形式更加突出细节,展示了细微和精致的“微笑”。

2. 体现“多样性”结构

在进行人物心理描写时, 尽量避免平铺直叙, 可以多采用如非谓语动词的形式, 作为谓语动作的伴随状态, 从而使得描写到位, 并体现语法结构的多样性。如:

①Her eyes were filled with tears, and she offered her sincerethanks to the man.

②Tears filling her eyes, she offered her sincere thanks tothe man.

分析:①句在描写心理活动“哭泣”时,用到了Her eyes were filled with tears。而②句则把这句改成了独立主格结构,运用了Tears filling her eyes,更显得描写的细致,同时也体现了句式的多样化,展示了高超的语言运用能力。

3.展示“丰富化”修辞

除了选择细致的心理描写词汇和多样化的句式表达外,提升语言层次的另外一种方式是多使用修辞方法,例如:

①The smile on her face shone like a diamond.

②I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.

分析: ①句中, 把“微笑”比喻成“像钻石一样闪闪发光”; 而②句中,把“悲伤”比喻成“漂浮在悲伤的海洋里”,展示了用修辞来体现细节描写的丰富。

二、心理描写的素材

1.与“喜悦和满意”相关的词块

a bright/shining smile灿烂的微笑

a mixture of excitement and happiness既兴奋又开心

burst into laughter/burst out laughing突然大笑起来

be wild with joy/delight欣喜若狂

be joyful about/at/over对……很高兴

be in high spirits情绪高涨

be pleased beyond description快乐难以言表

light up喜逐颜开

be content/satisfied with对……满意

be delighted at对……很高兴

with pleasure非常乐意

2.与“悲伤和烦恼”相关的词块

be sad at heart心里悲伤

be down in spirits情绪低落

an ocean of sadness悲伤的海洋

burst into tears/burst out crying大哭起来

sob啜泣

be clouded with grief阴沉的悲伤

be in low spirits情绪低落

fall into despair陷入绝望

feel depressed/discouraged感到沮丧/泄气

have a worried look愁眉苦脸

3.与“生气和怨怒”相关的词块

be very angry at对……很生气

feel angry/annoyed感到恼怒/生气

be seized by anger充满愤怒

be fuming with rage大发雷霆

tremble with anger愤怒得颤抖

a look of burning anger愤怒的一眼

glare at sb.怒视

flare up勃然大怒

be in a rage一怒之下

be mad at对……生气

三、迁移应用

One day, my brother and I were alone in our apartment. Thereason was that my parents had both gone for a ball party and had left me incharge of everything. I was doing my homework while my younger brother waswatching TV. All of a sudden, the doorbell rang. Ding-dong! Ding-dong! My youngerbrother had rushed to the door before I decided to answer the door. We boththought that our parents had come home.As a result,he unlocked the door andopened it.

Outside of the house stood a man who wore a black raincoatand black rubber boots. He looked no different from other people and he saidthat he was a salesman and asked politely if our mother or father was at homeso he could talk with them.

Without any thinking, my brother said, “No.”He asked if wewould like to buy some comic books, which he was selling. I quickly explainedto him that we were not supposed to buy anything without our parents’permission. However, it seemed that he was not willing to follow my advice andhe had an intention to enter our house.

Then, I realized something terrible would happen. As I wasabout to close the door, he forced his way into our house. He took out a knifeand forced me to tie up my brother’s hands with some rope which he took outfrom his pocket. I tied up his hands but I tied in a special way so my brothercould untie himself as we often did. The man then tied my hands up and lockedboth of us in the kitchen.

Soon, he went upstairs to search the bedroom for somethingvaluable. I managed to teach my brother to untie the rope on his hands. He thenuntied me. I rushed to the telephone to call the police, but the line was dead.

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The doors were all locked from the outside and what’s worse, Idid not have the keys.                                                                  

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Just at the same time our parents came back home.

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The doors were all locked from the outside and what’s worse,I did not have the keys. But luckily, the man forgot to lock the kitchenwindow. Both my brother and I managed to get out of the house through thewindow with joy and we ran to the nearby police station, nervously but happily,where we asked them for help. The police bravely arrived at our house as soonas possible. And as a result, the man was caught, which made us very happy.

Just at the same time our parents came back home. The policeasked my family to go to the police station. It was at there the police told usthat the man was a wanted robber pretending to sell comic books and they hadbeen looking for him for a long time. The police praised my brother and me forour braveness. Back home, I told my parents the whole story about the robberywith a mixture of excitement and happiness. They were thankful that we were nothurt but they scolded me for not stopping my brother from opening the door tostrangers. I learned a lesson on safety and responsibility.